User:Mrothroc/Dihydrogen phosphate/Safrye8 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mrothrock


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Mrothroc/Dihydrogen phosphate


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Dihydrogen phosphate

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead- The lead for this paper is strong and informational. There is a lot of information on the sources of dihydrogen phosphate. I would suggest breaking up the beginning a little to make it easier to find relevant information. For example, there could be a section on "sources" where a lot of the information in the lead can be placed.

Content- The original page was lacking a lot of information on sources and uses of dihydrogen phosphate, so I liked that you found a wide cover of information on those topics. Overall there is a good range of information on the topic presented. One thing that my page (also on a compound) had was a side bar with all of the chemical properties of that particular molecule. I'm not quite sure how to do that, but it definitely is helpful in finding out quick facts on the compound.

Tone and Balance- The tone in which this article was written has a neutral tone. The article is unbiased and therefore presents as more reliable.

Sources and references- I checked the links to each source and they all were active and brought me to reliable webpages. From what I can tell, the information in the article is all backed up with citations.

Organization- In terms of organization, I would suggest shortening the lead section and adding two subsections; sources and uses. In doing so, the reader will be able to find the information that are searching for in a more efficient manner. If you can figure out how to add the side bar on chemical properties, that could also be a meaningful addition to the page.

Images and Media- There is not a whole lot of images or media on this page. The graph that is provided in the acid-base equilibria is clear and easy to read. Having some sort of picture of the structure of dihydrogen phosphate towards the beginning (maybe in the lead section) might make this page a little more eye catching.

Overall Impressions- Overall, this article seems to be fixed up well. There is a lot more information on "everyday" topics that the average person might find more interesting. Originally most of the information on the page was about equilibrium constants and information that someone without a chemistry background might not be able to easily understand. Your additions make this article easier to read and therefore can reach a broader audience.