User:Ms1904/Nomura's jellyfish/Lhi1001 Peer Review

General info
Me: Lhi1001
 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Editor: Ms1904


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Ms1904/Nomura's jellyfish
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Nomura's jellyfish

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall, this draft looks really good. I like how your bolded text demonstrated that you added a more reliable source if needed. Nothing unusual stuck out to me reading this, everything had a nice flow to it, and was all relevant to the topic. I was wondering though if it would be more convenient to cite your information after each sentence? I find that it can be difficult to keep track of citations, if one does not appear for another three sentences. This way, it would be easier for the reader to know exactly which source was responsible for the material in that one sentence specifically. Other than this one distraction, this was really good work. Another thing I forgot to mention is that you need to make sure that all the articles that you are using for this draft are included in your bibliography. Otherwise, nice job! Lhi1001 (talk) 19:17, 9 March 2024 (UTC)