User:Ms1904/Nomura's jellyfish/Simone.eloise Peer Review

In the sandbox, there are a couple of paragraphs pasted over from the main articles page, but it is a little hard to identify the changes that have been made. It seems like there have been a few more sources posted in, based on the bibliography at the top of the page, but I cannot seem to see where these sources have been incorporated. In any case, when incorporating a source, additional information from the source should be added to expand upon what information the source covered.

The article could use some significant improvements, not only with the addition of more citations, but also the writing itself. The introduction of the article is very brief, and does not exactly address the most important components of Nomura's jellyfish, as it doesn't even mention where they are found, and includes some less relevant information such as how edible they are. The article also lacks a clear description of the jellyfish, specifically their physical appearance or their living preferences.

Basically, every section of the article could use being expanded upon, with additional citations highlighting the changes implemented to the article.

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