User:Mschott1/Catharine Macfarlane/Abomb66 Peer Review

Peer Review
Great start! I think something you do well is neutrality. There is lot of facts and information presented in a clear, organized manner. You clearly go over many of the position he had her in life and with multiple sources. Your sources seem good to me. Your article has a good structure that is easy to follow and your intro at the beginning is nice too, though I think it could afford to a little longer. I like your external links. One of the immediate things I would suggest is to vary your sentence structure a bit, many sentences feel like they have a similar flow and that can cause people to lose interest. Maybe combine some sentences and ideas and keep people on their toes. I would also like to see more about her personal life and who she worked with. I think that would humanize her a bit more and maybe balance out the article a bit if you can. That may also help your lead, which is good but could afford to have a little more detail.