User:Msullivan31/Legionella pneumophila/EMD89480 Peer Review

General info
Msullivan31, Curleighfries, Princesseslikescience, Jrg81957
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Msullivan31/Legionella_pneumophila?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Legionella pneumophila

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

- - L. pneuomphila consists of 90% of Legionaire's cases --> will add more relevance i like it

- L. pneumophila is a bacterium that can be found in numerous different environmental conditions. It can preside in temperatures ranging from 0-63 °C, a pH range of 5.0-8.5, and in dissolved oxygen levels of 0.2-15.0 mg/liter. --> i like that you added more specific details to their habitat. maybe specify mesophile, thermophile, etc.?

- Biofilms on plumbing systems and in water distribution systems is where a lot of L. pneumophila can survive. --> be careful with grammar (is --> are) but i like the specifications about their most common habitats and how they may interact with humans

-- combined drug targets and treatment --> i dont think you should spend a lot of time on this (not included in rubric)

-Great start! maybe add a heading about metabolism (how they gain carbon, energy, electrons)