User:Msullivan31/Legionella pneumophila/Njkleb Peer Review

General info
Msullivan31
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Msullivan31/Legionella_pneumophila?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Legionella pneumophila

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The lead of this article is overall a good introduction to the microbe, because there is a good variety of very broad background knowledge that can provide basic information on the microbe without diving into too many specifics. There are also a lot of other Wikipedia articles that are linked in the lead, which is good.

Most of the content is pretty well done, because it goes into an additional degree of detail about that specific component of the microbe. Some of these content sections could still use some additional information, but in general, the depth is appropriate without going too far.

Currently, the information seems biased towards the larger scale impacts of the microbe. For example, there are whole sections about infection and treatment, but there is very little about the metabolism and cell structures, which are some of the requirements on the rubric.

Some sections have lots of sources cited, but some (such as "drug targets and treatment" and "nutrient acquisition") have none, so that's definitely something that needs to be addressed.

I think that the separation of information into sections is pretty good so far - none of the sections are way too saturated with information, but each section has a decent length and depth.

There are some very minor things that should be addressed before publishing these drafts onto the live article (italics, clean up some phrasing and grammar, etc.), but there aren't too many glaring issues here.

Overall, there's some really decent progress here. By far the highest priority in my opinion should be adding citations for the sections that are currently lacking them. Beyond that, generally fleshing out those categories such as cell structures and metabolism is also important.