User:Msullivan31/Legionella pneumophila/Rosalea24 Peer Review

General info
Msullivan31
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Msullivan31/Legionella_pneumophila?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Legionella pneumophila

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

- I like that you guys included relevance to the real world, and who is mainly affected by this microbe.

- Under drug targets and treatments, I think maybe you could expand on the testing methods of seeing how certain drugs affect your microbe and how this reflects in to the group of people it mainly affects.

- More citations seem to be needed under nutrient acquisition. Theres a lot of information but lack of sources in that area.

- Some of the linking to individual words don't have descriptions under them elaborating.