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Depression in childhood and adolescence

Assignment # 3
Proposed Changes
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·      Original sentence to be improved: “They learn to monitor their negative thoughts, to become aware of the link between their thoughts, the effect their thoughts have on them and their behavior, to become aware of and change the negative, depressive thoughts which affect their health and state of mind”

·      New sentence: During cognitive behavioural therapy, children and adolescents with depression work with therapists to learn about their diagnosis, how to identify and reshape negative thought patterns, and how to increase engagement in enjoyable activities.

Rationale for Proposed Change

·      Original sentence was very confusing to read and difficult to follow. Seemed as if each listed item in original sentence was taken from a book and joined together without careful consideration.

·      Source for original sentence was very old (published in 1979).

·      Grammar was poor.

·      For the proposed change, I wanted to ensure that the new sentence accurately outlined the major strategies used in cognitive behavioural therapy (CBT) to treat depression using an up-to-date source (published within the last 5 years). I also wanted to ensure that the new sentence was concise, easy to follow, and grammatically correct.

Reference

·      Oar, E. L., Johnco, C., & Ollendick, T. H. (2017). Cognitive Behavioral Therapy for Anxiety and Depression in Children and Adolescents. The Psychiatric clinics of North America, 40(4), 661–674. https://doi-org.proxy.queensu.ca/10.1016/j.psc.2017.08.002

Controversy or Varied Opinions About Planned Change

·      There exists no controversy or varied opinions about my planned change. My planned change objectively states the strategies used in CBT.

Critique of Source

·      I critiqued this source using Wikipedia’s reliable medical sources (MEDRS) criteria.

·      The source is a literature review and is therefore a secondary source which meets MEDRS criteria (primary sources should not be used for medical content on Wikipedia). This source summarizes scientific consensus regarding CBT.

·      The evidence is up-to-date as it was published in 2017 (within the last 5 years), and it references recent studies and trials throughout the paper.

·      There is no apparent possibility of bias in this source. The article provides a balanced overview of CBT as it does not exclusively feature studies which found CBT to be effective in treating depression— it also features results from studies that found CBT to be ineffective. Additionally, the authors stated that they had no conflicts of interest to disclose.

·      One potential issue with the source is that the review discusses CBT for depression and anxiety, rather than just depression. Therefore, when choosing what information to share from this source, I had to ensure that the CBT strategies I was listing in the new sentence were actually used to treat depression, rather than anxiety exclusively.

What to post on the Wikipedia article talk page?

 * This will also be covered on Nov 23rd in class. Your group should use the below template to share an outline of your proposed improvements (including your new wording and citations). Article talk pages are not places to share your assignment answers. The Wikipedia community will be more interested in viewing your exact article improvement suggestions including where you plan to improve the article (which section), what wording you suggest, and the exact citation (Note: all citations must meet WP:MEDRS)
 * You will not be able to paste citations directly from your sandbox to talk pages (unless you are interested in editing/learning Wiki-code in the "source editing" mode). We suggest re-adding your citations on the talk page manually (using the cite button and populating the citation by pasting in the DOI, website, or PMID). You will have to repeat this process yet again when you edit the actual article live.
 * Talk Page Template: CARL Medical Editing Initiative/Fall 2020/Talk Page Template