User:MuseumHours/Library of Congress Subject Headings/Cameron Kletke Peer Review

Right away each sentence is structured in a great straight-forward fashion, although I did notice the lack of consistency when using the word Indigenous, which should be capitalized. Im not going to lie, I was a little confused which paragraphs were original excerpts and the edited versions, but going off of the article with the heading; "regarding indigenous studies," I think it is very well written and organized. Some language-related nitpicks I have is to not use the word 'Firstly,' it sounds a bit essayist to use that word when making an argument, I think a semi-colon would suffice. Using more references especially in the statement of how Indigenous authors take issue with the term 'Indian' to describe Indigenous materials, providing a link to proof of that would really benefit that argument. I think using the word 'thus' in one of your last paragraphs also yields an essay-kind of writing. The references you've included look great, although I do think you could add more references in discussion to Indigenous concerns and perspectives when it comes to how they are represented by North America and LCSH's miscataloguing problems.

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