User:MuseumHours/Library of Congress Subject Headings/Lianawongg Peer Review

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MuseumHours


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 * User:MuseumHours/Library of Congress Subject Headings


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 * Library of Congress Subject Headings

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(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Hello, this is Liana:) Thank you for this article, the Library of Congress Classification system is something new for me that I have never spent time reading, it is great that you are writing about this, in order to bring awareness to the topics that many might not notice before. We should have known more about this, especially when it comes to Indigenous Studies, so I am really glad that you are writing this article and putting it in front of the public on Wikipedia.

The sources that you have chosen are all reliable sources that have helped you with gathering different information into this article that you are writing, which I would consider as quite academic materials as well. I am very interested in the part of the Indigenous representation and studies, such as the part of how the word, "Indian", are being widely used (or I should say misused) which led to the searching result of the Indigenous community, it is something really problematic but important to know, thank you for brining that up.

Here are some of my thoughts and suggestions, feel free to disregard them:

-No lead section or paragraph, but if adding to an existing article then it would not be a big problem. Writings are clear, informative, and neutral but could be written in a more formal and Encyclopaedia tone. The paragraphs are not fully composed yet and paragraph structure is a little confusing for readers to read, but it is because it is still being edited. It would be great if there are more sections to divide some main points into a subheading, one to two sentences to simply introduced and summarize the topic before jumping right into the topic would also be helpful. As a reader, I would say having a more divided part with the main points or examples that you have, provided me with an overview of the whole picture before spending more time on reading the article, which also would help a lot when you are editing as it is also clearer for you!

-I think your writing has been very informative and explained very well on the topic you have chosen, yet for a person who is not familiar with the topic, it might be a little confusing to understand. Adding an introduction or lead sections would be great for readers to get a basic understanding before diving into the actual article.

-I saw there is a Library of Congress Subject Headings page on Wikipedia already, which I am assuming that you will be adding to the existing article? If in this case, I think what you have are great to be added into the article, as the existing article has a well-explained history and background information, which it would be well-rounded with what you have, including the Indigenous representations to the page, it would also be great if there are more cultural aspects, or maybe could include some art-related topics? I think having more examples would be strong points to support and highlight the issues to the readers.

-I am not sure what else you will be adding to your article, or how much you have edited already, but I am looking forward to seeing how this article would go!