User:MvKino/Colonisation/Baum019 Peer Review

General info
MvKino
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:MvKino/Colonisation
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Colonisation (biology)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Note for myself: sections added-Dispersal, Competition-Colonisation Trade-Off, Land Vertebrates and Plants. Lead:


 * I don't think you added or changed anything to the lead from what I can see. If you wanted, you could add a blurb about what you added in the body. Just a little taste so people know what to expect while reading the article.

Content:


 * The sections you added made sense and were a good addition to the wiki. I am not in the biology field, so some of this went over my head. However, it all seems relevant to the topic that is being discussed.

Tone and Balance:


 * The tone in the paper is relatively neutral, I didn't feel like I was trying to be persuaded to a particular side.

Sources:


 * I noticed that you only cited one source total in the "Dispersal" and "Competition-Colonization Trade-Off" sections. There are large sections that you don't have sources at all. I think that you should work on finding academic papers that represent what you were discussing.
 * Secondly, there is a source in the lead section that says "citation needed", I know you didn't write this part, but maybe you could look for something that can fit there?
 * Lastly, the 3 sources you cite are a bit odd. The first one (number 5 in the list) is Britannica, which I am not sure that is a reliable source since it isn't an academic paper. Maybe finding a better source for that would be helpful. With sources 9 and 10 in the list they show "proxy Umaine" since you are accessing them through UMaine. I would recommend making sure you copy the doi from the specific paper and use that instead of just the website link you are visiting.

Organization:


 * With regard to the content you wrote I think you did good so far! There are a couple places where I would change around the sentence structure, but otherwise they are looking good. I will list a couple sentences that could change a bit just so you have some reference as to what I am talking about.
 * "Dispersion, in biology, the dissemination, or scattering, of organisms over periods within a given area or over the Earth." Changing the start to "Dispersion in biology is the disseminaton, ..." would make more sense.
 * "This is considered a driving factor because all species have to make a decision to entertain competition with others in the community or disperse from the community in hopes of a more optimal environment." This sentence could potentially be more concise. This is just a recommendation as well, don't feel like you have to do it if you don't agree.
 * "These discissions often come up due to breeding, nutrient availability, and other factors where stronger individuals will challenge one another for priority." Discussion is misspelled, and the wording at the beginning of the sentence could maybe change.

Images:


 * I don't think you added any images, so maybe finding one for the land vertebrates or plants section that you added would be nice?

Overall Impressions:


 * Overall I think you added two good sections. There are just a few refining things that need to happen, mostly with sources.
 * I have 2 recommendations for changes, but they aren't necessary to change because they aren't from your writing. The "Scale" section seems to have some incomplete sentences, so you could fix those structures a bit. The second suggestion has to do with the lists in the "colonisation events" section. Each bullet point starts with a lowercase letter, and some don't have periods. I would maybe try to make these complete sentences as well.
 * Good job so far!
 * Remember constructive criticism is just one point of view, if you disagree you don't have to make the change! Good luck on the remainder of the semester!