User:Mylissa I/User:BaoNgo97/Javier Tapia/Bibliography/Mylissa I Peer Review

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The lead is a single sentence giving a quick concise description of the artist but does not give information as to what is included the article as a whole. The article contains nothing but what is relevant to the topic and does not stray off topic. The content appears to be up-to-date and may possibly deal with wikipedias equity gap of Peruvian born artists. Most of the content sounds neutral and does not sound like it's trying to persuade the reader in any way except for one of the last sentences "Tapia seems to see students' weaker efforts as a personal insult, so he tries his best to make his student into something new and better." This sentence could be up for debate about whether it's neutral or not. The article could do with a few more sources seeing as one particular source seems to be used multiple times. More secondary sources to back up the current ones could be useful for credibility. The links all work and appear to be up to date though there may be better ones out there. The article is clear, concise, and easy to ready. It's a very quick read in fact.There is an error right in the beginning of the article seeing as there is a period before the first sentence. This is obviously a very easy fix.There are a couple of grammatical errors where the author refers to the artists as "her" and then refers to the artist as "he". This needs fixing right away. The content is well organized though it could do with more information. The sections are incredibly small. There is a single picture in the article displaying what appears to be the artist. The caption under the picture sounds a bit confusing "Javier Tapia by Terry Brown Richmond artists to Reynolds Gallery." I am unsure if it adheres to Wikipedias copyright regulations though the picture itself is very appealing to the eye. As a new article it definitely needs more reliable sources, I don't believe the amount of sources the article lists represents all reliable sources. The article does contain section headings and even a graph showing/explaining the artists exhibitions. The article does connect with other articles so it'll more discoverable. It would be more discoverable, however, if its information was lengthened.