User:MysticMythos/Cycladic culture/RaccoonEnjoyer Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

MysticMythos


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Editing User:MysticMythos/Cycladic culture - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Cycladic culture - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall, I think the reorganization of the page does add to the flow and structure of the page. I think some small adjustments could help add to the article. I think adding citations where it says, "needs Citation" and possibly editing text to fit the available literature would be helpful and improve the accuracy of the article. I also think a few organizational things can be adjusted in order to improve flow even further, the map under "Early Bronze Age" can be nudged up so that the alignment of the section can be fixed not a big deal but improves appearance. The frying pan image I believe can be moved down to the archaeology section and some reference to it made in the text to draw reader attention, there I think it could serve as a valuable example. When it comes to wording, I found that not much had been changed which could be improved mostly with backing up claims that are uncited or changing them to match the literature like previously mentioned. One phrase however, I think one phrase feels out of place, the phrase "broadly compliments" in the lead, it feels unclear as if it could mean these things are at relatively the same time or it could be that the archaeological evidence from these periods with these peoples is similar. I think with some small changes and added citations this article can be greatly improved and the changes that have been made add to the flow of the article.