User:NAS26/Angela Robinson (filmmaker)/Mecstud Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

NAS26


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:NAS26/Angela Robinson (filmmaker)


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Angela Robinson (filmmaker)

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think your leads are concise enough and help the reader to understand exactly what is being added where. I particularly like how you've added your own sub-headers for each of Robinson's separate works.

For content, I think it all seems up to date, looking at your sources. However, maybe copying and pasting the article above your draft and explaining in the edits where you think they would best fit would make it easier to visualize. The content in Robinson's current Wiki page is in paragraph format, so maybe rearranging your data to fit in the same way would make it flow better. I do like your inclusion of her awards since they are factual and not included in the original. I think adding more details about the themes of her work would be important as well. You give brief synopses of each of the works added, which is helpful to understanding her awards, but her themes are so important that maybe emphasizing them would help her page round out more.

I think the tone of your draft is great, nothing seems to be persuasive or opinionated. I think maybe putting the information in sentence or paragraph format would make it feel more readable instead of facts listed. But really, great job on giving what is needed and nothing more, I definitely had trouble not hyping up my filmmaker like we're supposed to.

Again, maybe just removing the bullet points would make the information flow better when added to her article. If you wanted to keep the bullet points, maybe adding a lead like "Film Topics" or something similar would indicate that each film is just going to receive a brief synopsis.

No images were added, which I totally get. I tried to look for some for mine and it is so difficult to find any that don't seem to have a copyright.

Overall, I really like the diverse amount of information you have added. I focused on one topic as an addition, but I like that you touched on several films, her awards, and briefly on themes. As a reader who does not know much about the filmmaker myself, I desired a little bit more on the themes and styles (i.e. what makes her films hers), but overall I feel like I would learn a lot more from her Wikipedia page if your edits were added.