User:NCcunyevo/Troglomorphism/Thomasdquigley Peer Review

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First off, I enjoyed reading this article. I was interested to learn that organisms adapt, in an evolutionary sense, to caves. Also, the tension between the "dead end" and reservoir of genetic variability arguments is well presented, especially in light of our last class discussing mosquitos. So, very interesting content!

I have a few brief suggestions. Firstly, I gather that the intro paragraph is supposed to highlight/list the following sections of the article. I would add that. Secondly (and this is purely subjective) the intro might benefit from an example. You mention the Mexican cave fish later, but adding an example in the intro might make the topic more clear.

I found this lead sentence a little confusing "While general trends are maintained, Troglomorphic species can be highly variable." Do trog species generally resemble their non-trog relatives? Are trog species more variable in character than no-trog ones?

Also, I was confused by the sentence beginning "A current theory holds that beneficial traits..." What are "negative associations" and what genes does "these genes" refer to?

Finally, when you write "This evolutionary break" do you mean break in the sense of rest?

Those are the only points I found confusing. Otherwise, very interesting and clear article!

Thomasdquigley (talk) 18:38, 5 April 2023 (UTC)