User:NEHESPADAMUS/George Alexander (artist)/Jovanna.moya Peer Review

Lead

 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * I think your Lead works well. It gave me enough information to know what to expect in the article. Birth, nationality, type of artist, common motif, and where his art has been featured. You gave all of this information in a three sentence paragraph. I think that is successful because when people visit an article that's the first thing they will read, so it needs to give as much information as possible in a short amount of time so it can grab the reader's attention to continue on. Great job!
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * While you did give great information, from what the template asks, maybe more information is needed. But when I check the A+ articles that Strathman provided, I see their leads look similar to yours. I think this option of adding a brief description of the articles major sections could be a personal decision.
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * It looks like there is a lot of information missing for your article. I do see the headings in place, so I believe you do intend on adding that information. I see that in the bibliography you mention the artists nationality (this info was also in the lead). So I think this was successful. Continue with this trend and I think the article will be great.
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?
 * Concise and with appropriate and helpful information.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * I believe the information provided in the bibliography is relevant to the artist and their career. I see the first paragraph explains their nationality and current residing location.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * Yes, your content is in a neutral tone. Just simply stating the facts.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * I think this is the biggest negative point I would give to your article. I see your sources at the bottom of the page, bit they are not hyperlinked nor any of them used as intext citations. So theres no way for me to know if the information you have given is reliable.
 * Another think I would like to mention is that I visited the artists website and their bio is oftly close in language to your bibliography. I would rewrite some of this to make sure that it doesn't come off as plagiarism.
 * Specifically the points with his parents and their illness/passing. As well as his heritage portion. It reads a bit too close to his website.
 * Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You'll need to refer to the sources to check this.)
 * Not allowed to cite or use the artists website as a reference. Everything must me SECONDARY SOURCES.
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Again, I really can't give any critique on the references because they aren't cited nor linked. I tried to copy/paste, but they dont take me to the exact source.

Organization
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 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Yes, I think this is successful in your draft.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * George Alexander(‘s), Muscogee heritage is passed down to him by his father.
 * His mother on the other hand was white which makes George Alexander mixed with half Muscogee and half white
 * Ofuskie is a Muscogee Creek Nation Citizen. Put in the 1st or 2nd sentence before mentioning heritage.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Yes, its a portrait.
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Possibly put the date photo taken or age of artist.
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Im not sure. Is this photo copyrighted??? Double check.

Overall impressions
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 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * Fill in the intended headings.
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * Concise and good information.
 * How can the content added be improved?
 * Double check for plagiarism and double check grammar and flow of sentences.

General info
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 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)