User:NEMO LEGEND/Business Communication/Magnificent Mind Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

NEMO LEGEND, Hunter.browne


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:NEMO%20LEGEND/Business_Communication?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Business communication

Evaluate the drafted changes
I thought that your introduction mentioned interesting components such as employee participation and involvements as part of the techniques that describe business communication. However, I think the structure can be improved. Somewhere in the introduction, preferably in the beginning, I would have appreciated a sentence or two explain or defining business communication in the simplest terms. After defining what it is I would then follow up on how management communication has impacted both employees and employers.

I liked how you added more content to the article by giving information on international communication. However, I do think you can improve the content of this subheading by explaining what it is and how it has shaped communication internationally. Perhaps giving short case studies would help. Whilst doing this it is also important to stay neutral which I think you have been doing quite well.

Looking at the sources you have added and yet to include, they are some good sources. I would also advice to add more citations to the introduction as I saw some gaps in the original article.

Overall, the organization is decent. Although I would advice you to add more content in order to make your contributions clear and easier to follow. A little more engagement with the subheads would help with this.