User:Naanjee44/Data Discourse/Chrispedia315 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Naanjee44


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Naanjee44/Data_Discourse?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
-A few grammar mistakes, mobilized, naturalizes, utilized, and Foucault

-Give a brief example on one of Foucault's theories on the term 'discourse'

-Maybe move the paragraph "Examples of data discourse" right under the first paragraph of "definition of discourse" I thought having examples follow up the definition will help in understanding the term

-Maybe change the subtitles to start each word with a capital letter

-Add more to the "Data as discourse" paragraph, or add it into the definition paragraph

-Nice use of big data, explaining how those terms go together

-Elaborate on what imaginaries means to clarify the last two paragraphs, maybe give it its own paragraph to define it