User:Naanjee44/Data Discourse/Clalae Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Naanjee44


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Naanjee44/Data_Discourse?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
-Overall good article, missing a bit of information but well written from a neutral standpoint

-Add a lead at the top summarizing your main ideas

-A few minor spelling mistakes (Foucault, Mobilized, Utilized)

-Use footnotes and reference list for your citations

-Maybe use another word than "something" in first paragraph to avoid repetition

-You can maybe include the “data as discourse” and the example following into one paragraph and perhaps elaborate on what “data as discourse means

-As well, possibly add some real-life examples of data discourse.

-Use sub-heading 2 for “discursive regime” if it is the title to a new topic.

-Second last paragraph “(...) it must be set in specific settings for shape and meaning making” could maybe be changed to “It must be set in specific settings in order to create shape and meaning”