User:Nairmeera02/The Heroic Slave/Baileyberhannan Peer Review

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Evaluate the drafted changes
Great lede paragraph.

of 19 slave, not by 19 slaves

Reword the abolish sentence.

move the slave rebellion sentence up or rework the sentence, reads strange here.

good plot summary, re-read just to make sure it comes off clear to audience, seems a bit jumbled.

Link Purdue University, just for more context.

The "at the event" sentence is a little long and confusing.

The next paragraph is a bit confusing, remember we don't know the context like you.

Love the next subtitle!

Be careful for spelling errors, I changed the ones I found.

Rework the refuge paragraph.

Summary:

Overall, your page is in good shape, I would reread from an outside perspective just to fix those awkward sentences and paragraphs. A few times you make a comment without context or little explanation, I would just elaborate a bit more so it is easier to follow. You had a few spelling errors that I changed, so if you put this all on the actual page I would edit. You don't have many sources, so if possible I would add. Great work!