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For Queer ecology

Evaluation of article: Upon first glance, the entire article seems completely disorganized and poorly thought out. From the standpoint of a person who is not well versed in queer theory, it is impossible to have a general understanding of the general concept behind queer ecology.

The section I was assigned to copyedit was the Arts section, which reads:

''"Visual artists have begun taking queer ecology out of its theoretical concepts, applying queer ecology as a way to inform their practice.

Lesbian National Parks and Services, for example, is a multimedia project developed by the Canadian performance art duo of Shawna Dempsey and Lorri Millan in 1997, queering the idea of national parks and “challenging the general public’s ideas of tourism, recreation, and the ‘natural’ environment."

The Institute of Queer Ecology is an artist collective that describes themselves as “collaborative organism looking to find and create alternatives” in order to “nurture a new environmental paradigm based on the concepts of interconnectivity and inseparability.” They have participated in group shows, curated exhibitions, and edited “The Queer Issue” of the zine ECOCORE. " ''

The only references this section includes are in reference to the examples that take up more of the section than the actual explanation of the relevance of art that has to do with queer ecology and the relationship between art and queer ecology theory. The first sentence is the only time the article explicitly states that art uses queer ecology, but it does not say why that matters and it limits the range of art mediums to visual artists, while the first example in the next paragraph is of a multimedia project of performance artists.

Below is my copyedit of the first two paragraphs of the Arts section: '' " Across all mediums of art, artists have begun using the theories and ethical implications of queer ecology to inform their oeuvre. Through these art forms, queer ecological theory becomes tangible and accessible to people beyond the academic space. https://www.jstor.org/stable/41819890?seq=1#metadata_info_tab_contents (I wanted to bring at least one of Aarons' concepts up here)

The multimedia project developed by the Canadian performance art duo of Shawna Dempsey and Lorri Millan in 1997, Lesbian National Parks and Services, communicates the importance of sexual inclusivity beyond the bounds of human society by inserting themselves as “a lesbian presence” in “history and biology” centered spaces to effectively correlate queerness with the natural environment in which it exists but with which it is rarely associated." ''

I also wanted to add stuff from https://doi.org/10.1080/00043249.2016.1171547 to this section and thought https://www.pdcnet.org/collection/authorizedshow?id=enviroethics_2001_0023_0002_0169_0188&file_type=pdf offered great insight on Queer Ecology as a broader topic, so it could have a place somewhere in the article.

Peer Review:

Hey Naiti!

This is a good start! I, like you, have no idea what queer ecology is and am even more confused about how art fits into it. I think a great place to start would be to potentially insert some examples of the art. Right now, I'm unsure of what this even looks like. If you do insert some concepts, make sure that they continue to be accessibly worded and well explained. A lot of the article seems to be pretty opaque in terms of explanation and vague wording is used to explain concepts. For example, in your second paragraph, it would be helpful to know what the project looked like, rather than just what it was trying to convey. I understand that queer ecological theory can become more accessible through the art forms, but I still don't quite understand how and in what physical shape that takes. These are things that you have probably also been struggling with, but I truly think that a small step you can take is inserting an example of the art. I would also encourage you to stay away from quotes because they seem to promote confusing, academic language around queer ecology.