User:Naomil07/War on women/Chloejoy5 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * Naomil07


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Naomil07/War_on_women?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * War on women

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The content of the two sections added I believe is really valuable and well written. You do a great job of showing the material in a neutral way even that prevents any writer bias. I think the information included is really great information, but I think it could benefit from more sources and points of view. It was all written with one source and I think it needs more sources and information to round it out and make it more multidimensional. It will also make the sections more relevant to the topic as a whole with new sources. That being said, this was a great peer reviewed source and I was able to find it openly using your source link, which is great.

Organization wise the article is nicely written and user accessible. It is precise and easy to read and follows a clear line of thought. I also think that the addition of these two sections is valuable to the topic as a whole. I also like the use of the image, but would recommend adding a caption to help it connect to your sections better.

Overall, great job! This is a really great start and I'm being picky because sometimes more specific feedback is better than "wow it looks great." I think the addition of a few sources would really strengthen this, but I am very impressed by the writing itself.