User:Naomistow31/Extraterrestrial life/Backhand03 Peer Review

General info
Naomistow31
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Naomistow31/Extraterrestrial_life?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Extraterrestrial life

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Lead
The Lead has not yet been edited from what I can see here.

Content
The changes to the Body of the article is concise, relevant and appears to be up to date. The author discusses Extraterrestrial life and ties this to life (and the origin of life) in extreme conditions on earth (they discuss factors such as temperature, UV radiation, and lack of water) while providing proper, up to date sources (from the past 20 years). While I don't would not say there are gaps in the information provided, I think there are areas that could be expanded on if the author chooses. As stated, the author ties together extreme extraterrestrial environments and extreme environments on earth that contain a diverse array of life and have even been theorized to be the starting places of life on earth. The author could expand on this point and point out what aspects of these environments make them ideal for life to originate to tie things back to their statement about extreme environments "seeming unlikely" to harbor life.

The author could also explore thoughts/opinions from scientists or the public on extraterrestrial life, since they do mention extreme environments on other planets seeming "unlikely to support life". Some people believe this, other don't it would be interesting to have a source on who thinks this makes life un/likely and why.

(equity gaps not addressed/ not relevant here)

Tone and Balance
The overall tone is neutral and the author appears to seek to present information for the purpose of education not persuasion. I did not see any claims that were either biased or unsupported by evidence in the material. However, technically all the information written so far is in support of the possibility of extraterrestrial life so another side could be introduced (perhaps the author could discuss elements necessary to life that aren't often found on other planets? I think there are a lot of ways that this could been done either briefly or in depth).

Organization
Overall, Grammar and organization are done well here. My only suggestions for improvement in this area would be to cut out repeated words (or lessen their use) such as "quite" which is used often. Additionally, the first sentence to be cited lists "extreme temperatures" and "intense cold" separately which could be removed to be less repetitive if the author chooses.

Images and Media
These are not used so far.

Overall Impressions
My overall impression is that the author has done a good job with this project and has some great information down. I think some minor organizational changes could be made to make things read more smoothly (as specified in the section above). I would be careful of the phrasing of life seeming "unlikely" to occur in extreme conditions as this could be read as personal opinion, but I do not think that is the intent in this case.

I think that this is a really great topic (and very relevant to our class material). Because of this I think their are many different directions that could be taken and many ways in which the material here could be expanded upon, whether that is added different opinions on extraterrestrial life or exploring the relationship between aspects of extreme environments thought to have lead to life on earth and those that are found on other planets, or something else entirely.

Overall, the work done so far is very strong, but there are areas that could be expanded up further.