User:Nat2026/Animal-type melanoma/Wboy02 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Nat2026


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Nat2026/Animal-type_melanoma?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Animal-type melanoma

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

I think the lead does a great job of providing a brief description about what animal-type melanoma is. It can be a little hard to understand from someone who doesn't know about the topic fully, but the sources provided explain the topic further to help aid that confusion. I think the addition of a simple picture related to the topic could be pretty useful here in drawing visual people into the article.

Content

I think the article holds a lot of important information related to the melanoma disease. I think a couple of the sections could be developed a little further by adding more details about what has been said in the section already. For example, in the treatments section you could add more information about various cancer treatments that could help and the mortality rates of those treatments. I also think pictures in sections like signs and symptoms could be beneficial to readers trying to identify the disease.

I really like the causes and diagnosis sections because they provide multiple ways the disease can be caused and identified. The sections also do a really good job of explaining the sub topics within the sections further than just listing out the causes.

Tone and Balance

The tone and the balance are both very neutral. This works really well for this topic because it makes it easy to process the information. There are also no opinions present in the article.

Sources and References

The sources are all from reputable sources with several sources being peer reviewed scientific journals. There are a lot of nationally reputable sources that have been used throughout the article. Most sentences are also backed up by a source that is accessible and has a working link. The sources also come from a wide range of authors such as the National Cancer Institute and scientific case studies and experiments. The article also does a good job of linking other articles throughout to increase the article's overall reach.

Organization

The article is organized in a very appealing way. It is easy to follow along with the article because each section go into the next one and builds on the information that has already been provided. You can also just read one section by itself and understand the information that is being presented. The content itself is very concise and easy to read.

Images and Media

I think a few images scattered throughout the article could help the article in a substantial way. You have most of the information already, so the pictures would make the article an easier read and help back up a lot of the information that you address in the article.

Overall Thoughts

I think the article has definitely been improved because there is a lot more content that explains the basics of the disease. I think if this article wants to be improved more, images and other media could be added to provide a visual representation of the information that is provided. I also looked at other wikipedia articles about various diseases and they include sections about how the disease works and how it actually infects people or becomes active in people. They also include information about who is the most affected by the disease along with geographic information to back that up. They also provide information about how to prevent the disease. I think sections like this would be beneficial to upgrading this article even more than the big upgrade it has already received. Historical context about the disease could also be a good section if added to this article. Overall I think this article has significantly been improved and just needs a couple additions of media to comfortably meet specifications for the project. The article could easily be built on by other users.