User:NatalieJHammons/Brucellosis/Rashaaasfour Peer Review

Lead:

I understand that you only editing certain parts of the article. I think it would be helpful, if for your first sentence, you help introduce us a little more to serological tests. I feel a bit thrown in and would like to understand it more, because it sounds very interesting. Have more of a lead for the introduction to your prevention aspect of the article. Perhaps starting with " there are many different forms of prevention for this disease such as:"

Content:

I really enjoy the information that you are bringing to this topic, especially because prevention is really important to the irradiation to disease, however, I feel like I am needing more information as to how this is prevention. Could you go into more information about the vaccine, or the procedures that have taken place to in certain areas of the world, for irradiation and prevention to continue?

Tone and Balance:

You did a really good job at keeping a neutral, unbiased tone in the factual information that you are providing. It is important to stay neutral and not lead the general public and I feel like you did a good job at that.

Sources:

The sources that you have provided are recent and are good resources, to be using, however there is some information that is needing sourcing in the article.

Overall impression:

overall I think that the information that you have contributed to the article is really interesting and important information to be having. I would just like a little bit more of all the information added, like going in depth. Overall I think that your writing was good and clear, and sounded very professional, and I really enjoyed the contributions to the article you have added.

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