User:Nataliefong00/Tantramar Marshes/Laurenmonroe Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Nataliefongoo)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Nataliefong00/Tantramar_Marshes?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Tantramar Marshes
 * Tantramar Marshes

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

This wikipedia article draft gives a great summary of the Tantramar Marshes and only needs slight improvements. The paragraphs were clear and concise so that the information was easy to understand. The information that would not be common knowledge was explained well so that the average reader can understand this information.

The "National Wildlife Area Status" section was clear about the why this area became a protected area and when. It was also clear about the size of the area and the types of habitats it consists of. It also stated the restrictions of the area and the human activities that are allowed there. There is a description of issues and goals that led to the protection area. This section has only one grammar mistake which is an indent in the second paragraph, but nothing other than that, great job!

In the "Natural Environment" section in the "Plants" paragraph there were also explanations as to why some of the plants were important to this habitat which was explained well. This section identified species at risk in the area and other species in the area including plants and animals. This section was organized well and is also good at conveying information that is not common knowledge to the average reader. The "Climate Change" paragraph was also very concise so that it highlighted exactly what aspects of climate change would impact this protected area and why. This paragraph also described how climate change is predicted to affect the ecology in the area well. There are a few grammar mistakes in this section. "Storms bring in unusual levels of precipitation and strong winds which can damage the fragile ecosystems of the marsh, and the dykes which help prevent flooding from the Gulf of Maine ." This sentence does not need a comma. "Rising sea levels increase the threat of flooding, too much for the marshes to be able to regulate ." This sentence also does not need a comma. These are minimal grammar mistakes, the information is still easy to understand.

The "Land and Water Use" section describes the historical uses of the resources of the protected area well. It describes how the resources where extracted and who was extracting them well. More information about how this impacted the ecosystem would make this a stronger paragraph so that the reader can understand how these processes affected the habitat. The "present uses" paragraph explains the human activities restrictions well and describes some of the problems with these descriptions. The "historical uses" paragraph could use indigenous sources because it may leave out some Indigenous perspectives. However, this information is sufficient to understand how these resources were being used at this time. This section does have a few grammar mistakes. "During the 19th century the land use in and around the Tantramar region changed to a few different kinds, like deforestation of the marshlands was at an increasing rate as timber was growing in demand " This is a run on sentence. ". other land uses in the 19th century included the creation of sawmills, shipbuilding, stone quarries and the increase in trade and industrialization in this region ." This sentence needs capitalization. "All of these contributing to why the Tantramar region needed to become a protected area in order to avoid complete environmental degradation and extinction." This sentence needs the word "are". "With the Tintamarre National Wildlife Area becoming a protected area, many of the uses of the area are no longer permitted, with many restrictions being imposed with how the land and water surrounding it can be accessed and used ". This sentence should have a different start, it is a run-on sentence, and it doesn't have a period. These grammar mistakes affect the flow of the reading but the information is still conveyed well.

Overall, I learned a lot from this reading, my favourite part was how the Keystone species were explained and how they help this protected area. I learned about the history of the protected area and the many types of species that inhabit it. The tone of this article is neutral which is great. It conveys and explains information very well and does not have any opinions associated with it. There are enough sources for this article, most are peer-reviewed and government websites which are credible sources of information. However, some of the sources are not peer-reviewed such as: source numbers 24, 40. Sources 33-40 do not have hyperlinks which is not much of an issue but makes it more difficult for the reader to find the source. However, source 35 does not have sufficient source information. Something that was missing from this article was the protected area management implementations and how these would be monitored, and if there is any progress being made. This information is not vital but would help the reader to better understand what actions are helping these endangered species recover, and if these species are recovering. This article addresses the most important aspects of each topic and does not go into too much detail. Overall, this article is well-written because the information is conveyed in a way that is comprehensive to an average reader. This article also does not go into great detail and only explains topics that are necessary to explain which makes this article clear and concise. There are some grammar mistakes which makes some of the reading more difficult but this is easily fixed. Some of the sources do need proper citations but most of the sources are government websites and peer-reviewed.