User:Natalieychu/Live online tutoring/HK khawaja Peer Review

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Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Natalie, here's my summarized review of your work:
 * Natalie, one of your sources, the "wall street journal" requires wiki user to login, as far as I remember, professor suggested that we use open-access sources for reference. You might want to take a look at that.
 * Second para, second sentence, just a minor grammatical-tweak from "student need" to "student-need": Each barrier is a unique student need that can be compounded by...
 * I wonder where you will add this section in the main article?
 * You might want to look at the references section, not sure if we are supposed to cite like that, but just check with the professor.
 * The sources look like leading to the correct platform, so that's good!
 * Overall, in my opinion, the tone of your article is well balanced and neutral, so kudos!
 * Overall, great organization, and you might just need a few changes to make it a lot better!
 * The sources look like leading to the correct platform, so that's good!
 * Overall, in my opinion, the tone of your article is well balanced and neutral, so kudos!
 * Overall, great organization, and you might just need a few changes to make it a lot better!
 * Overall, in my opinion, the tone of your article is well balanced and neutral, so kudos!
 * Overall, great organization, and you might just need a few changes to make it a lot better!
 * Overall, great organization, and you might just need a few changes to make it a lot better!