User:Natalieychu/School segregation in the United States/HK khawaja Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Natalieychu


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Natalieychu/School_segregation_in_the_United_States?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * School segregation in the United States

Evaluate the drafted changes
Natalie, here's my summarized review of your work:


 * There are no citations, linking to sources in the first two paragraphs
 * You talk about a study in the second paragraph, but there is no citation there as well: "study conducted by Sean Reardon and John Yun found that from 1990 to 2000"
 * In the third paragraph you talk about schools being sources of measures, but there is no citation there to support your statement: Consequently, urban school districts became relatively accurate measures for documenting the increasing educational inequalities among students of color.
 * I like how you stated which section of the original article you are going to edit, stating "Article up for revision"
 * Overall, I feel your work is balanced and has a neutral tone
 * I wonder why the first two paragraphs of the revised work are still the same as before. Did you mean to keep them as-is?
 * For your sources, I'm seeing that there is only one source for reference, so I would suggest maybe using more.
 * Overall, I feel your work is balanced and has a neutral tone
 * I wonder why the first two paragraphs of the revised work are still the same as before. Did you mean to keep them as-is?
 * For your sources, I'm seeing that there is only one source for reference, so I would suggest maybe using more.
 * I wonder why the first two paragraphs of the revised work are still the same as before. Did you mean to keep them as-is?
 * For your sources, I'm seeing that there is only one source for reference, so I would suggest maybe using more.
 * For your sources, I'm seeing that there is only one source for reference, so I would suggest maybe using more.