User:Nathan.brenn/Community gardening in the United States/Joshuapak11 Peer Review

General info
Nathan Brenner (Nathan.brenn)
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Nathan.brenn/Community gardening in the United States
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Community gardening in the United States

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

I really enjoyed reading your sandbox!! I think your evaluations significantly enhance the breadth and depth of the Wikipedia article on community gardening, particularly by expanding its geographical focus to include the East Bay area.

However, there are aspects that could be refined for clarity and effectiveness.

Firstly, while your first addition effectively highlights the importance of urban agriculture in addressing food insecurity and promoting agricultural education in the East Bay cities, the addition could benefit from further detail or examples to support the claims made -- just like the previous paragraph right above your addition! For instance, providing specific examples of successful urban agriculture programs or highlighting key achievements in addressing food insecurity or promoting education would strengthen the credibility and relevance of the statement -- perhaps going beyond your example of the City of Oakland because I feel look like that focuses more upon providing examples of community gardens through zoning and land use policies but lacks specific details about food insecurity and education.