User:Nathan.brenn/Urban agriculture/Joshuapak11 Peer Review

General info
Nathan Brenner (Nathan.brenn)
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Nathan.brenn/Urban agriculture
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Agroecology

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

It was so interesting to read and learn about the topics relating to your sector, Nathan! Overall, your additions to the Wikipedia article on urban agriculture significantly enhance its depth and relevance. The inclusion of information regarding the importance of soil health and the participatory nature of agroecology adds valuable context to the discussion.

However, there are areas that could benefit from improvement. Firstly, the language used in your additions could be more formal and encyclopedic in tone to better align with Wikipedia's standards. For instance, phrases like "sustainably grown food free from pesticides and harmful chemicals" could be rephrased for a more neutral tone, such as "sustainably produced food with reduced chemical inputs."

I loved your addition regarding the concept of urban agriculture's role in closing circular energy loops, but there are a few points to consider for improvement.

Firstly, while the revised sentence effectively communicates the idea of circular energy loops, it may benefit from further clarification or expansion to ensure clarity for readers who may not be familiar with the term. Adding a brief explanation or example of what is meant by "circular energy loops" could enhance the accessibility and understanding of the concept

And lastly, the sentence you added could be -- once again -- further refined to align more closely with Wikipedia's tone and style guidelines. Simplifying the language and avoiding technical jargon where possible can improve readability and accessibility for a broader audience. For instance, "Urban agriculture (UPA) fosters circular energy cycles where food is grown and consumed locally, reducing the need for waste exportation to rural regions."