User:Nathan Yu 2023/Yuantouzhu/7ommybo1228 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Nathan Yu 2023


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Nathan%20Yu%202023/Yuantouzhu?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Yuantouzhu

Evaluate the drafted changes
The author added the lead. The original article has been written in great detail in the lead section. I think you only added two sentences but you can add more information like a brief description of the article's major sections

The content is relevant to the topic. It is easy for the viewers to understand. I see you have several sections, including major spots and ticket price. But make sure the information is up-to-date becuase the ticket price may change over times.

The tone is neutral and unbiased. There are no claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position. One thing you need to be aware is that when you talking about Wang KunLun, you could show the viwers more credible reference to prove he was an outstanding revolutionary activist, whether writing old style poetry or new poetry. Otherwise, people may think your tone might not be unbiased as you said "he has shown quite high literary accomplishment."

Nathan added 5 more sources and it looks good. All links work and they reflect the available literature on the topic. But I think you can find more sources that are reliable such as peer reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites.

You could also try to add more photos to each of those major spots. Overall, the content Nathan has added improved the overall quality of the article.