User:NaudikaW/The Bed Sitting Room (film)/AstariaP Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

I am reviewing NaudikaW's work here


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Since it appears this article focused mostly on drafting a change to the plot area I will focus on that but also review the rest.

Lead:

the lead looks good, I don't think much was done here to change from the original but since that doesn't appear to be the focus, it isn't to concerning. But the lead is short and concise and factual. Nothing wrong that I can see here.

Content:

The content all looks related.The content is all up to date and I don't see any noticeable equity gaps. The plot seems to be a bit of a large section, but it appears the breaks in the field are for edits or notes being made for edits. Could use a little more structure.

Tone and Balance:

the tone and Balance all generally appear neutral and without any agenda or goal. All facts seem to be presented straightforward without any opinion or Bias.

Sources and references:

Sources all appear to be from appropriate places and legitimate. However the links do not work, you may want to update it. If you use the "cite" tab, you can properly generate sources. That would be my biggest feedback.

Organization:

Organization is generally good and readable other than the section being worked on but im sure that will change shortly. Other wise sections are easy to find and navigate.

Images and Media:

No images and media yet, but that's not really necessary at this stage

Overall Impressions:

Over all impressions is that it is a good first draft you have going. I would say focus on fixing your references and cleaning up that Plot area. Otherwise its looking great!