User:NaudikaW/The Bed Sitting Room (film)/Hunterelizabethhill Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

@NaudikaW


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * @NaudikaW's draft
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * The Bed Sitting Room (film)

lead:
The lead seems to be good but there may be a grammatical error in the second sentence. I like how you mixed it up in the second sentence tho.

content:
above all else work on formatting and titling your contents (for example, labeling the plot and themes content sections correctly). Good jon adding onto the release and reception section. I see that you added a good amount to the plot but it may be a bit excessive and you may want to condense it as much as you can.

tone:
overall tone is great and neutral. tone wasn't bad in the original and you did a good job keeping It as such.

sources/references:
you are probably already aware of this but make sure you are formatting your sources correctly and using hyperlinks.

images:
no images added.

overall impressions:
I didn't have too much to work with but it seems as though you are heading in the right direction. I'm curious as to why you added to the plot in the way that you did, but I am unfamiliar with the show in a way that you may not be. overall just polish this up and I think it will turn out great.