User:Navar2mr/Igala people/Herbe1mg Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Navar2mr


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Navar2mr/Igala_people?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Igala people

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think that your lead is a very good start to your article. You keep it short sweet and to the point. It doesn't look like anything was sourced for this section of the article so I would be careful of that and maybe go through and make sure you add some sources. You also talk about the farming culture and the geography a little bit within the lead. It looks like you are taking out the food section so I would maybe add the small bit of information that you have also into the culture paragraph. This is because from the lead that farming is probably pretty important to the community because of the geographical location. This would be a point I would bring up later to tie everything back together.

As I mentioned earlier that a lot of your article is being re-written which I understand due to plagiarism but I was wondering if any of the previous people have written back in the talk page about these sources? This could be something that you could ask in there just to double check since it was so much information. I can also see that a lot of the info was cut due to a unreliable source, I would see if I could find any more articles on at least the bigger sections like geography or culture so that their is some more information on the people not just on their art.

Looking at the information that you provided it seems to all be good information. For the masking section of the article I would expand a little more on some of the subjects such as what materials do they use to create their masks. The materials is something that various between different cultures so that might be something useful to have depending on if you have the information or not. I would also look at the Religion sections within your article. I am little confused by the note that you put in the first section about whether you were moving the information downwards. I think combining these two paragraphs will really help cut down on that confusion.

I think that overall your article was a good start to the project. I think that the sources that you did cite are good sources. While some of the material still needs to be cited which you did indicate they all seem pretty good. I would make sure that you add the page numbers to sources that you cited by using the template to having the correct formatting. I would also look at the notable people section of the article. Some of the links take you to bing cites but they don't seem the most reliable and maybe should be removed if they don't contain a decent link. I think that this section is cool and is very interesting I am just unsure if having those other pages on their would help. Overall I think that your article has a good start. I am looking forward to seeing the finished product.