User:Ndongh10/LGBT rights in Zambia/Macgoodwin13 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ndongh10


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Ndongh10/LGBT rights in Zambia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * LGBT rights in Zambia

Evaluate the drafted changes
- In need of more sources, and references need to be properly cited in the draft.

- Grammatical errors needs to be addressed the sentences "Therefore, the consenting homosexual adults were sentenced to 15 years. In prison." need to be combined. Also, "therefore" is not necessary in neutral piece of writing, and does not fit where it had been used.

- If properly edited, the draft would add to the main article as the section focused on by the user has not been updated in three years.

- No photo edits, however it does not seem that any photographs would add to this section of the article.

- Further work is needed to expand the draft, which could be accomplished by focusing in on the chosen section, or by expanding to minor edits of each section in the main article.