User:Ndunka34/Delano grape strike/LeoAHearl Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

I'm peer reviewing Kayla's article, who's username is Kmmg12, but the article is under Ndunka44.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ndunka34/Delano_grape_strike?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Delano grape strike

Evaluate the drafted changes
The article looks good so far. It also doesn't seem to be biased. I think the topic itself is relevant for the already existing page, but I would dive deeper into the issues and conflicts during the strike. I would also change the format a little. Some sentences feel like filler sentences, and they can be added to a fuller sentences instead of standing alone. She's doing well with added the citations under references, though. I would add some in-line citations, or doing the Wikipedia links for people like Caesar Chavez or other terms that relate to the topic.