User:Nehal al-Shamy/Ibrahim Rauza/N hatem2001 Peer Review

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Nehal Al-Shamy
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Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The lead was sufficient to give a brief about what to see going in depth in the article sections. I suggest categorizing the lead/introductory paragraphs under a subtitle (About or Introduction for example). Also I suggest changing the name of the article to Ibrahim Rawza Complex, as when I read the title, I thought I’d be reading about a few buildings established by Ibrahim Rawza and for someone who is not with us in ARIC 5121, he’d expect reading about the biography of Ibrahim Rawza.

Content

The content is well-written and is detailed to a great extent. As I mentioned, the name of the article should be adjusted to refer to the complex, so that the information would be directly relevant to the content.

Tone and balance

The topic is discussed in a balanced an neutral point of view. However, I would suggest avoiding the use of some words that would add your perception/historical personal perceptions of the complex, such as using the word "magnificent", or use the word and explain in what terms was the the building seen magnificent or compared to which buildings. Also at the introductory paragraph. The word "almost identical", explain in what terms the mosque and mausaleum were identical in brief before going in depth later on. For example: … were almost identical in form, in building materials, in the user experience, etc…

Sources and References

You have already added enough resouces to the article. The citation is correct.

Organization

The work is well-organized into sections and goes in depth as we go far with reading. The article is easy to read and its language is readable and understandable by every English-speaker. I suggest using Grammarly to avoid grammatical mistakes and writing errors. Well done, Nehal.

Images and media

I know it is sometimes hard to add images, especially that we need permission to use someone’s work. But, if there is a chance, add a picture or a few for the visual learners and for clearer elaboration.

Overall impression

The article is great in terms of everything, I provided extensive feedback to take this article to a level of perfection. Great job, Nehal.