User:Nehal al-Shamy/User:Hossamelganainy/Begumpur Mosque/Nehal al-Shamy Peer Review

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Hossam El-Ganayni
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Hossamelganainy/Begumpur Mosque - Wikipedia
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Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

The lead successfully gives a brief description of the monument, introducing the reader to an overall idea on what to expect in the article. I appreciate that you provided the Hindi name of the monument. I suggest adding Urdu as well since it is one of the major languages in the region and it reflects the original name of the monument.

One sentence that was not very clear is "which now bears its modern name." If the city bears a different modern name now, I suggest you provide it for more clarity.

Content:

The content is excellent, covering almost all aspects of the monument. Still, there are some points which may need further clarification.

I would suggest that you provide more context on the coins' images you used. You may want to add that coins are proof of the existence of these patrons since their historical identity is seemingly contested. Furthermore, when you mentioned that the mihrab is " reminiscent of the 'Ala'i Darwaza", I think you have to explain that you mean only the color Palate, not that the design of a mihrab is similar.

The sentence " was used as a village" was also unclear. I suppose you mean they used it as houses for vernacular purposes (like in Ibn Tulun). You would need to elaborate on this or at least make the sentence clearer for the reader. Also, the quotation by Herbert Charles Fanshawe does not seem to belong under usage. Maybe you can add it under Architecture in a separate subheading titled "description" or "Traveller's Accounts".

Tone and Balance:

The tone was neutral and unbiased, conforming with the requirements of an encyclopedia entry. Even when there were two theories, you tried to present them on equal foot.

Sources and References:

The sources used are reliable and academic between academic books, journal articles and trusted websites, which is plausible.

Organization:

The article is vey well-organized, dividing the information into many subcategories and subheadings for more accessibility and readability.

You may want to consider changing the heading "Comparisons" into "Influences" since you are discussing earlier Timurid and Indo-Islamic influence on the mosque. Also the heading "Conservation" into something like "Current State" since there is no conservation project to be discussed.

I also noticed one grammatical mistake in this sentence " There are two theories on who is the patron of this magnificent monument." It should be " There are two theories on who the patron of this magnificent monument was."

Images and Media

The images are excellently chosen, giving an overview of the different aspects of the building. I appreciate that you combined using current and historical photographs in addition to adding a plan.

Considerations for New Articles:

The article brought to Wikipedia an important monument from the Sultanate period in India. The article utilized many secondary sources discussing the mosque. The article has also linked many relevant monuments to the Begumpur mosque.

Overall Impressions:

The article excellently presented the monument. Its significance is that it provides a new entry on an important monument of the Indo-Islamic heritage.