User:Nehal al-Shamy/User:N hatem2001/Chaurasi Khamba Mosque/Nehal al-Shamy Peer Review

General info
Nadeen Hatem
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:Editing User:N hatem2001/Chaurasi Khamba Mosque - Wikipedia
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Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The article is missing a lead that gives a general idea about the monument. You delved directly into describing its construction period, architectural style… etc. These can be subheadings that come later in the content section.

Content:

You provided fairly good architectural information about the building. However, the content under the "About" section may need some development. In the subsections of Cultural Significance, Religious Significance, Symbol of Syncretism, Heritage Preservation and Tourist Attraction, the content provided did not add specific information about the characteristics or the history of the building, which is the purpose of an encyclopedia entry. You may also want to reconsider the location of these sections within the article because they can come later after the architectural description of the building. In this regard, you might want to consider elaborating on each section and giving specific pieces of information or examples to illustrate the significance of these sections for the building.

Also, a clearer explanation may be needed when you introduce a new name of a person or a city. For example, you mentioned the name of a person named " Baha al-din" in the inscription. However, you did not elaborate on this point or why he was mentioned. Was he the patron? The architect? A craftsman? Etc.

Tone and Balance:

In the architectural section, the tone was neutral and conforming to the encyclopedia requirements. However, in the "About" section, you may want to consider a more academic voice and use restrained nouns and verbs rather than using many adjectives. You still may use descriptive adjectives; however, you have to be cautious not to overuse them. The About section generally needs to be more specific and informative.

Sources and References:

The sources used are reliable and academic.

Organization:

You would need to add a clearer lead. Also, you may consider reorganizing the about section in the way mentioned above.

Images and Media:

The article still needs more visuals.

Overall Impression:

The article provided a good description of the architectural features of the buildings. Yet, it needs more specific information about the other aspects to give a holistic view of the building.