User:Nell Curtin/Language exposure for deaf children/Hayleydt Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Nell Curtin


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Nell Curtin/Language exposure for deaf children


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Language exposure for deaf children

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead


 * Lead section contains info from the new information being added to the article!
 * The first two sentences could be consolidated together to create a more concise introduction to the topic.
 * Lead contains information a brief description of major sections, but it is a bit overtly detailed and might benefit by being shortened just a little bit.

Content


 * Content is very relevant - good idea to add a section dedicated specifically to sign language exposure and opportunities for parents!
 * Great edit to the cochlear implant section! I definitely saw what was originally written to be a bit problematic and outdated!
 * Unsure if the content is up to date since citations are not fully added yet.
 * A recommendation - maybe keep some of the information about how only 10% of Deaf children are born to Deaf families? Might be a useful and important statistic when explaining sign language exposure.

Tone and Balance


 * Article seems fairly neutral!
 * Different viewpoints are not overrepresented

Sources and References


 * Citations are not fully complete.
 * From what I can see, sources seem more up to date than the original article.
 * Variety of sources - different authors or organizations

Organization


 * Content is well written.
 * Maybe split the sentence in the lead that starts with "Many theories..." with a semicolon? It's a bit of an awkward sentence.
 * Content is well organized!

Images and Media


 * I'm unsure what images you could use with this article, but I feel like maybe one visual would be beneficial for those who are reading the article?

Overall Impressions


 * Content has definitely improved the overall quality of the article! It's more current and more researched!
 * Strengths: Adding the Sign Language Exposure section!
 * Improvement: Shortening the Lead just a little bit.