User:Nemerson4970/No Child Left Behind Act/Aasaro4970 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

I'm reviewing Nemerson4970's wikipedia page.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Nemerson4970/No_Child_Left_Behind_Act?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * No Child Left Behind Act

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Natalia, I like your current Wikipedia changes to the No Child Left Behind Act page. I think that you were correct in that the Legislative History needed updating. With your updated section, it was well written and neutral in opinions. The one thing that I would change is to combine the newly edited section with the section of the Groups of Supporters/Opponents. By combining it, you could explain how these groups helped changed or passed this bill into becoming an actor. I also like how you added the Major Titles of the Act and explained what each section does. This will help the audience to understand the act way better. These newly edited sections are well summarized and easy to read. Lastly, I had checked the sources, and all look very creditable. All of your grammar and clarity of the sentences are perfect.