User:Nemerson4970/No Child Left Behind Act/Emilycs4970 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

I am reviewing Nemerson4970 's work.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Nemerson4970/No_Child_Left_Behind_Act?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * No Child Left Behind Act

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hey Natalia!

As for the Lead of the article itself, it definitely needs more citations, and I think you can provide those!

The content of the drafted changes you have made is incredibly thorough. I am very impressed with the content you are making. I think it could help the average reader if you broke up the paragraph into more manageable sections rather than having one large paragraph. Other than that, the tone and balance of your draft is neutral, unbiased, and straightforward!

I appreciate the fact that you have citations for every sentence of your draft. This is a huge part in proving that your draft is reliable and strong. Will you be adding sources for the content you put in the Major Titles of the Act section and its subsections? I’m not sure how you would be able to without it only being the act itself over and over, but if you want to brainstorm about it, feel free to message me :)

I really like how you are adding the sections/subsections providing descriptions of specific parts of the bill. This is so important in helping readers understand the bill itself.

Overall, your draft looks incredibly impressive! I hope this review helps, and if you want to brainstorm or you need someone to proofread anything, let me know!

-- Emily S.