User:NesreenShah/Ableism/Rennoelle Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

NesreenShah


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:NesreenShah/Ableism


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ableism

Evaluate the drafted changes
It was clear there was a gap in the ableism article regarding healthcare, since there was only one sentence under the title of healthcare and it only addressed the issue of abortion. The lead of the article is detailed and does an effective job at describing what ableism is, why it is important to look at ableism in different settings, and what stereotypes are given to this population.

Regarding grammar, the second sentence under “Ableism in Clinical Settings” is missing a period at the end. Additionally, I was not sure what source the statistics mentioned in the second and third sentence were from. I also recommend adding commas to the last sentence of the paragraph that talks about why those with disabilities may be more hesitant to seek care. Additionally, under “Healthcare in Criminal Justice Settings,” I think you may have meant to say “in the available healthcare setting” instead of “in the available healthcare” in the last line of the third paragraph.

Overall, the content added is very relevant, up-to-date, and addresses an underrepresented population, which is disabled individuals seeking healthcare in the criminal justice setting. I really like the topic surrounding healthcare in criminal justice settings and think the second sentence of this section does an effective job at summarizing why this topic is so important to include. One content area that could be expanded on or removed is the last sentence under this section that addresses older adults. This is a really important point to discuss, but where it is located in the article does not flow effectively. If you would still like to mention older adults with disabilities in criminal justice settings, I recommend expanding on this topic further and adding more sentences.

The sources are very up to date, relevant, and from a wide variety of journals. The doi to the third source was not working, so I would take that out if it isn’t necessary. I believe expanding on the healthcare section will really improve the entire article and addresses a huge gap in information. Good job and I really enjoyed reading your work!