User:NeuroResident/Spinal and bulbar muscular atrophy/Adjarock Peer Review

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 * Spinal and bulbar muscular atrophy

Lead
The introductory sentence is fantastic! The lead is concise and informative. Given the added content by the author in the history section, this should be reflected in the lead section with an addition of when the disease was first discovered or when the gene was first discovered. Additionally, the on going research section and be summarized in a sentence and added to the lead section.

Content
The added content of history, pathophysiology and ongoing research is relevant to the topic and up to date. The only content I think is missing if there are any trials on new treatments or cures or a sentence stating that there aren't any. Additionally, the demographics of patients who get this disease is not discussed and I would like to know if it related to underrepresented populations or topics.

Tone and Balance
The added content is neutral and unbiased. Viewpoints are well-represented. I think the tone is appropriate in most places, however at times it becomes informal and is essay like.

Sources and References
New content is backed up by reliable sources that are secondary in nature. The references added are appropriate and current. The links work. There is a citation missing in the management section for surgery as a correction of the spine as well as the genetics section in the last sentence.

Organization
The content added is well written and well organized. It is concise, clear and easy to read. Some words are not needed and more link outs are necessary to describe the more challenging scientific concepts, ideas, or famous people. I think there is no need to include “in terms of management” in management section as we already know what you will talk about given the heading. Bulbar palsy as well as proximal arm of a chromosome and AR gene under history could be linked as people may not know what that is. Additionally, some of the names could be attempted to be linked out if they exist if people are interested in reading more about it.

Images and Media
Images were not added by my peer.

Overall impressions
Overall this article is informative, detailed and well written. The content added has made the article more complete and improved its quality. The main improvements that could be made are making sure the tone stays formal throughout the course of the article, making sure all citations are in place, linking out to more pages given the specificity and complexity of the topic. Lastly, the main content I would like to read about are if there are any clinical trials currently underway to research a cure or treatment and this could be added either to the management section or the research section.