User:Neuscholar/Dimple Ajmera/Theoneandonlyjacobisaacs Peer Review

The information you have added is extremely relevant to the topic. The information you added in the early life and education section flows well within the structure of the Wikipedia article and adds important context to the proceeding section. The content you have provided in this section is up to date and utilizes scholarly works in order to give credibility to your arguments.

The information you have provided in the career section is clear and concise. It adds important context to the awards she has won as well as the struggles she has gone through. I think you could do a better job of being clearer with your final sentence in this section. It is a little hard to understand the direction you are going with the sentence until later on which can alienate the reader or make it unclear what actually happened.

Overall, I think your additions are important and allow the person to be given a larger spotlight on their accomplishments, struggles, and perseverance. I believe the sources you utilized were important and carefully chosen to provide authoritative examples.

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