User:Ngdana/Women's empowerment/Varshanekkanti Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ngdana


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ngdana/Women's_empowerment?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Women's empowerment

Evaluate the drafted changes
Content: I found the content to be a very interesting addition to the main published article. One gap in the main article was that there was limited discussion around the history of economic empowerment and women’s empowerment as a whole. With this being the biggest gap I noticed, I really appreciated the discussion about neoliberalism in the 1980s and how this theory influenced the push for self-reliance as a measure of economic success. I also found it was really valuable that you introduced the feminist approach to women’s empowerment because this was a significant gap in the original article.

Tone and Balance: The tone throughout remains unbiased and informative for the most part. One thing I noticed is the use of words like ‘generally’ and ‘overall’. One recommendation to strengthen your piece would be to adjust these words such that your piece has less generalizations.

Sources and References: I was really impressed by the diverse list of sources that you used for your article. The sources are definitely reputable and are frequently cited throughout the article. The sources also seem very thorough and come from a versatile assortment of authors. The links are cited correctly and work properly.

Organization: I thought the organization of your text made a lot of logical sense. Regarding the economic empowerment section, it might be interesting to consider placing the discussion about neoliberalism at the beginning of the section because that alludes to the history of economic empowerment.

Overall Impressions: Overall, the content is really strong and great work.