User:Nguyensoren/Jonah crab/Troyhupper Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Nguyensorem


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Jonah crab


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Jonah crabNote: I checked the history of the article after seeing you had already made contributions to the article, but I cannot tell what additions you have made. I also checked the sandboxes and those were empty as well. Therefore I will review the whole article.

Lead
The Lead is concise, but there are a few issues. First is that a physical description is given when there is not a specific section for the anatomy of this specific species. I think you could maintain this description if a section relating to the anatomy was constructed, specifically focusing on what makes this species unique and separates itself from other species of crab. Another is that the claim that its the closest living relative to the European Brown Crab lacks a citation. Perhaps search for articles and sources relating to the phylogenetics of the Jonah Crab to justify this claim, and phylogenetics could be another way to explain the justification for the Jonah Crab to be its own species.

Content
The content is good, but unequally balanced. The reproduction section is great and content rich, but the diet section section is severely lacking in content as it is one one sentence from one source analyzing the diet of the species in one area. I would suggest finding studies on their diets, especially in southern areas as their range extends to Florida. Perhaps you could compare the diets of those in rocky environments like the Gulf of Maine against silt and clay substrates, like the article describes in its habitat section.

Tone and Balance
For the first half, or what I would deem the "scientific portion" which would be the sections Growth and Reproduction, Habitat and Behavior, and Diet, are perfectly neutral. They do not suggest an opinion on anything, as it is simply describing the species. However, the last two sections of Fishery and Cooking are biased. Firstly, the referral to the fishermen who would release the caught crabs back as "angry" adds this unneeded subjective emotion in my opinion. I would suggest making the sentence more neutral by using words like unwanted, ambivalent, etc. to describe that the fishermen were were not really that angry at their presence, or you could suggest that most fishermen viewed them neutrally at best or were angered at them at worst. Secondly, a lot of the Cooking section relies on subjective taste reviews. I am specifically referring to sentences like "the texture is as fine as snow crab but as firm as Florida stone" or "it is not as meaty as the West Coast Dungeness crab" that should be removed or reworded. If the reader has eaten neither, then the comparisons are meaningless, but they are also subjective. I would stick to objective taste wording, such as flavors like sweet or sour, or further go into details about specific ways of preparing the crab or specific dishes that use Jonah crab meat.

Sources and Reference
The sources are from quality and reliable sources, but are somewhat out of date. A majority of them are from the early 2010s, and a lot of discoveries can be made in a decade. I did see that sources from 2019 were included, I would just try to add more to further modernize the article.

Organization
The article is perfectly fine in terms of reading ability, it is easy to read and concise. No grammatical or spelling mistakes were present. In terms of order and organization, I have some suggestions. Firstly, split the Growth and Reproduction sections in two sections. I would keep Growth where it is, and move the reproduction section to below the Diet section. Then, change the Growth section to a general Anatomy section, while still keeping the information from the Growth section. My reasoning is that the Growth and Reproduction section currently is only connected via the mention at when the crabs reach sexual maturity, so without that they are completely separate. My justification to relocate the reproduction section is a little subjective as I find it awkward to talk about the reproduction of an organism first before general anatomy and behavior. Personally, if I were describing a human, I would not begin with describing the reproductive aspects of humans, I would start with their exterior qualities like bipedalism and hairless skin with sweat designed for endurance running. Just a thought.

Images and Media
The pictures provide a visual of what the Jonah Crab resembles, but both lack captions. I would suggest to add captions of the images, but also add more varied pictures as both pictures essentially just show external anatomy of the crab. Perhaps a picture of brooding eggs or of a Jonah Crab eating mussel. Just something more varied.

Overall Impressions
Like I mentioned at the beginning I cannot tell what specifically you edited when looking at the history of the article, but I will give my impressions of the whole thing. It is a short article, but is in a much better state than most articles I saw when deciding what article I wanted. I'm sure it was in a much dire state before you edited it. There are still some rooms for improvement, but the changes aren't that difficult to achieve in my mind. By the end of the semester this will definitely be a solid article.