User:Nicole Lizbeth/Governance/Ericklemusss Peer Review

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Participatory governance focuses on deepening democratic engagement through the participation of citizens in the processes of governance with the state. The theoretical framework of participatory governance as a variant of governing can be dated back to the uprise of community organizations and forums seeking to deepen citizen participation in the government process in or during ____ .  The This decentralization of government systems allow s citizens to shape new structural arrangements. The idea is that citizens should play a more direct roles in public decision-making or at least engage more deeply with political issues. Government officials should also be responsive to this kind of engagement. In practice, participatory governance can supplement the roles of citizens as voters or as watchdogs through more direct forms of involvement.

Comments/Reasoning: I think you should include a time period for the uprise of community organizations and forums which is why I added "in or during ___". I also think that specifying the decentralization of government systems would help tie this sentence to the rest of the paragraph.

The role of citizens in participatory governance is to be afforded a form of state power as an elected group of non-political citizens to that contribute to the public policy process, allocation of public resources, and state authority. '''Different manifestations of participatory governance include participatory budgeting, councils, and community organizations becoming or getting involved at the state level by taking on state studies or participating in social issues such as housing. Over the last decade or two, the most rapidly growing form of participatory governance has been participatory budgeting. Observed with the British Columbia Citizens Assembly constructed Constructed in 2004 as the first form of direct citizen engagement in envisioning the provincial electoral system, and Brazil's adoption of participatory budgeting to "enhance citizens' empowerment and the quality of [their] democracy,"  the British Columbia Citizens Assembly introduces the discussion (or demonstrates) that increased citizen engagement increases the effectiveness, legitimacy, and social justice of democratic governance.'''

Comments/Reasoning: I think "that" is better than "to" just because you are describing the tasks covered through participatory governance. I think that there needs to be a verb after organizations. I also think that there should be a link to an article or a description for what you mean by state studies. Does this mean sociological research?

I also changed the structure of the sentence starting with "Observed by the" because the original structure was kind of hard to follow.

'''Action through participatory governance impacts policy at the municipal  level. An example is the use of municipal housing councils in Brazil to impact policy adoption, which finds that housing councils are associated with a greater likelihood of program adoption beneficial to the needs reflected expressed by the citizens. The mechanism of participatory governance links the social sphere to the political to produce policies directly molded by or influenced by citizens through their participation from their shared functional interests as community members for functionality. Therefore, participatory governance potentially improves public service delivery and the allocation of resources.'''

Comments/Reasoning: I put a link on the word municipal just incase readers do not know what that is! I changed "reflected" to "expressed" because I think that this shows how the social expression of needs leads to changes in the political, which is outlined in the next sentence. I also changed some words in the second-to-last sentence.