User:Nicolelaurenmarquez/Transgender people and religion/Evelynm333 Peer Review

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User: Nicolelaurenmarquez
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The format of your drafted changes is easy to follow and straightforward. I can see how you took inspiration from other parts of the article to inform your edits. I just have a minor suggestion that you condense the first few sentences just to make the first paragraph flow better. Another note is that you can define a few terms that might be unfamiliar. This helps the reader gain cultural understanding. The information in your draft is substantial and paints a picture of Sikhism and society.

I like that you wrote from a neutral position and do not let personal beliefs interfere. I can definitely learn from this because sometimes I think that my tone is too personal because I feel passionate about the topic I am writing about. Your sources seem to be reliable and neutral.