User:Nicolemicha/Pathological demand avoidance/Jalyn547 Peer Review

Peer Review

General info
Nicolemicha
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Nicolemicha/Pathological demand avoidance
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Pathological demand avoidance

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall Thoughts: I like the contributions you made. I think they will work well within the article.

Lead: The lead is ok so far. I like that you plan to move part of the lead down to the body of the article. I think that's a great idea. It will make the lead more concise. I think you should discuss what the article will be about and the subtopics it will get into. Other than that I think the lead is good.

Content: The content of the article is good. I think the topics that are present as of now are good. Content on the controversy and causes is a little sparse. It might be better to add some information there if you can.

Tone and Balance: The tone of the article is good. It is neutral all the way through.

Sources and References: I didn't see anything in the bibliography section. I assume you are waiting until the end to input all your sources.

Organization: The organization of the individual sections are good. I would rework the structure of the article as a whole though. I think a better organization structure would be: lead, history, signs, diagnosis, causes, recognition, and last controversy.

Images and Media: I didn't see any media in the original or the edited versions. I am not sure that this article needs them.